幻灯片 1写作突破五 记叙文
[分析指导]
一篇好的叙事文，必定有一个明确的中心。在叙事时，要交代清楚时间(when)、地点(where)、人物(who)、事情的起因(why)、经过(how)和结果(what)；要善于从事件的表面揭示其蕴含的科学性、哲理性或事件的社会意义。我们所写的记叙文不是为记而记，而是有感而发，有悟所写。所感所悟就是叙事的中心，写作时要注意把它贯穿于全文之中。
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幻灯片 2写记人的文章时，一要注重人物的肖像描写，重点描述人物的精神气质、内心世界和性格特征等；二要注重人物的语言描写，利用人物的独白或对话表现人物的心理状态；三要注重人物的行为描写，抓住具有代表性的动作，使人物形象鲜明；四要写典型具体的事例，反映人物的精神面貌。
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幻灯片 3[典题示例1]
(2010·浙江)
最近，李越被评为你们班的“每周之星”。请你根据她的事迹(在上周六下午，不顾天气炎热，为班级选购歌咏比赛服装)，用英语为班级板报写一篇100～120个词的短文。
你的文章应包括下列要点：
1．李越的事迹及其对同学的影响；
2．你的评论。
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幻灯片 4注意：1.文章的标题和开头已给出(不计词数)。
2．参考词汇：singing contest歌咏比赛 costume 服装
Star Student of the Week
Li Yue has been awarded the title of “Star Student of the Week”for what she did for our class.______________
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幻灯片 5[写作点拨]
本篇为人物及事迹介绍，属记叙文。事迹介绍要点要明确；对他人影响及评论属拓展内容。要求考生把握事迹介绍及评论技巧，注意表达技能。
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幻灯片 6[写作要点]
1．李越的事迹及其对同学的影响(look for costumes)
2．你的评论(warmhearted, care a lot about others, deserve the honor)
[参考范文]
Star Student of the Week
Li_Yue_has_been_awarded_the_title_of“Star_Student_of_the_Week”for_what_she_did_for_our_class. On the hot afternoon of last Saturday, Li Yue went downtown and walked from one store to another, looking for the costumes we would wear in the singing contest.
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幻灯片 7While the rest of us were enjoying our leisure time in cool and comfortable rooms, she spent the whole afternoon searching and selecting. Finally, she found the right clothes. Deeply moved by her efforts, we tried our best and won the first prize in the contest.
Li Yue is always warmhearted and cares a lot about the class. Besides, she often devotes her spare time to helping others. She has set a good example for us. Therefore, she deserves the honor and we would learn from her.
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幻灯片 8[典题示例2]
(2009·浙江)
5月1日。高二(3)班的学生志愿者Li Yue和Zhang Hua去阳光敬老院(Sunshine Nursing Home)开展志愿者活动(送水果、打扫、聊天等)。假如你是校英语报的记者，请按下列要点用英语写一则100～120个词的新闻报道。
1．时间、地点、人物、活动；
2．老人们的反应；
3．简短评论。
注意：报道的标题和记者姓名已给出(不计词数)。
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幻灯片 9Student Volunteers Brought Sunshine to the Elderly
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By Chen Jie, School Newspaper
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幻灯片 10[写作点拨]
要求以“学生记者”的身份写一则新闻报道，叙述学生志愿者去阳光敬老院的一次活动。试题有一定的开放性，要求考生说明“时间、地点、人物、活动”，叙述“老人们的反应”，并作“简短评论”，对考生的语言运用能力和信息的组织能力有较高的要求。命题综合采用了三种文体，即叙事(时间，地点，人物，活动)，描写(老人们的反应)，评论(校报记者的简短评述)，不同文体应该用不同的衔接方式以使行文流畅，如以时间主线表达叙事部分：upon their arrival, then, everything done。
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幻灯片 11[要作要点]
1．时间：May 1st
2．地点：Sunshine Nursing Home
3．任务：volunteer
4．活动：send fruits, clean/tidy, chat with the elderly
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幻灯片 12[参考范文]
Student Volunteers Brought Sunshine to the Elderly
On May Day, Li Yue and Zhang Hua, students from Class Three, Grade Two, went to Sunshine Nursing Home and did some voluntary work. Upon their arrival, Li Yue and Zhang Hua were warmly welcomed, and respectfully, they presented the elderly with flowers and fruits. Then, they started working at once, cleaning the windows and sweeping the floor. Everything done, they sat in the yard chatting with the elderly people.
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幻灯片 13When it was time for the volunteers to leave, the elderly people thanked them. They said it was such a beautiful day that they would remember it forever.
Li Yue and Zhang Hua were very happy. What they did has brought joy to others and enriched their own lives.
By Chen Jie, School Newspaper
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幻灯片 14[佳作欣赏]
Student Volunteers Brought Sunshine to the Elderly
Respecting the elders is the Chinese traditional virtues. On May Day, Li Yue and Zhang Hua from Class Three, Grade Two, went to Sunshine Nursing Home. They presented the loving heart to the elderly.
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幻灯片 15As soon as Li Yue and Zhang Hua arrived, they helped the old people clean the windows and walls, sweep the floor, deliver the fruit to the elderly who can't walk freely. Then they began to talk with the old men, caring for their health. Many elderly men were moved to tears and thanked them. However, Li Yue and Zhang Hua said it was their duty.
Their deeds encourage us, and we should learn from them. We must work together to build the kind of communities.
By Chen Jie, School Newspaper
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幻灯片 16[露一小手]
1．请根据下面的英文短诗，展开适当的想象，写一篇短文。
标题为：My Teacher Mr Moore
There's a teacher Mr Moore.
Who is lovely and thirtyfour.
Always encouraging us to try.
He leads us to a world of “why”．
We all admire him more and more.
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幻灯片 17注意：
1．不得照抄短诗原文。
2．必须结合短诗的内容，发挥想象，适当展开。
3．必须突出短诗的主题，结构完整，语义连贯。
4．短文不能写成诗歌形式。
5．词数：120左右。
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幻灯片 18[参考范文]
My Teacher Mr Moore
Of all my teachers, Mr Moore is the one who impresses me most. Though he is 34, he looks very young for his age. And he's one of the most popular teachers in our school.
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幻灯片 19Compared with other teachers, Mr Moore pays more attention to his way of teaching. He tries various ways to make his classes lively and interesting. In his opinion, we should not only know“what”， but also understand“why”. So, instead of giving us answers immediately, he encourages us to think by ourselves whenever he puts forward questions. With his help, we've learned how to analyze and settle problems. What a wonderful world of “why” he leads us to!
He is such a learned person that we all admire him very much.
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幻灯片 202．假设你是北京市某中学高一年级的学生李华，擅长舞蹈。你报名参加了2009年国庆60周年晚上的联欢。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，写信给你的笔友David，讲述参加活动的全过程以及你的感受。信的开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总词数。
注意：词数不少于60。
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幻灯片 21参考词汇：联欢gettogether
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幻灯片 22Dear David，
I am writing to share the great happiness of taking part in the performance in celebration of the 60th national anniversary.
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I will enclose some pictures taken that evening.
Wish you all the best!
Yours，
Li Hua
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幻灯片 23[参考范文]
Dear_David，
I_am_writing_to_share_the_great_happiness_of_taking_part_in_the_performance_in_celebration_of_the_60th_national_anniversary.
Dancing is my hobby and therefore, when I heard there would be a gettogether to celebrate the 60th National Day on the evening of October 1st, I signed up for the performance. Luckily, I became a member of the dance group.
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幻灯片 24During the summer vacation, I practiced hard with others regardless of the hot weather. After the new school term began, I carried on with the practice while I was working hard at my studies. And finally, the great day came. In the evening, thousands of people gathered in the splendid Tian' anmen Square. With the bright lights shining around, we were dancing to the pleasant music happily and joyfully. The beautiful fireworks in the clear night sky added to my excitement. It was really an unforgettable experience.
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幻灯片 25I_will_enclose_some_pictures_taken_that_evening.
Wish_you_all_the_best!
Yours，
Li_Hua
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