2013高考英语书面表达讲义及训练（40）及参考范文：书面表达精选
仿真训练3
（做题时间：10分钟）
短文改错
Christie was one of my best friend at high school. 1. _________
At that time, we often spend time together. 2. _________
Thank to her help, I made great progress inn my 3. _________
study. Last year, she decided to study abroad. In 4. _________
other words, we would be separated for long time. 5. _________
Before her leaving off, I prepared a gift to show 6. _________
my best wishes to him. She said it was the beat 7. _________
gift she has ever had. From then on, we’ve 8. _________
kept touch with each other through e-mails. I 9. _________
look forward to see her again in the near future. 10. _________
解题技巧点评
1．friend →friends：考查数的一致性。one of + 可数名词复数。
2．spend →spent：考查时态的一致性。文章开头和At that time都表明时间为过去。
3．Thank →Thanks：惯用法——thanks to sth. / sb. ：多亏了…。
4．√
5．for a long time：考查冠词的惯用法。
6．去掉off：leaving：名词/动名词：离开。
7．him →her：考查人称的一致性。通过上文多次出现的she或her可知Christie是个女孩。
8．has →had：考查时态的一致性。
9．kept in touch：考查固定短语。
10．see →seeing：考查非谓语动词。look forward to + 名词/动名词：盼望某事/做某事。
仿真训练4
（做题时间：10分钟）
短文改错
After five years away in my hometown, I find that 1.
the neighborhood which I used to living in has changed 2.
a lot. The Sichuan Restaurant and the older fish shop 3.
across the street from our middle school were gone. 4.
There exist now a park that has a small river running 5.
through. The factory at the comer of Friendship Street and 6.
Zhongshan Road has been moved out of the city, and sports 7.
center has been built in their place. The market at the comer of 8.
Friendship Street and Xinhua Road has been given way to 9.
a supermarket. Besides the bookstore next to our middle 10.
school is still there.
解题技巧点评
1．in →from：此句表示离开应用from；
2．living →live：used to do sth.表示过去常常做某事，而现在不在做了；
3．older →old：这里表示“老的、旧的”，不含比较级；
4．were →are：表示现在已经不在了，应是现在时态；
5．exist →exists：There be 句型中的谓语动词应与be后面的第一个主语来决定，a park为
单数，故谓语动词也用单数；
6．正确；
7．a：根据谓语是单数，此句应是：一个体育中心建成，故sports前加不定冠词；
8．their →its：指代错误，根据句意是指这个城市，应用its；
9．been：此句不应用被动结构，应用主动形式，故将been去掉；
10．Besides →But：根据句意，前、后句是转折，故将besides改为but。
仿真训练5
（做题时间：10分钟）
短文改错
Hi Susan,
I’m sorry that I wasn’t able to return to your 1. _________
bike on time yesterday. I mean to give it 2. _________
back to you before four in the afternoon，and I 3. _________
was hold up on my way back. Just before I 4. _________
turned corner of Park Street. I happened to 5. _________
see an accident. A little girl was hurt and her 6. _________
mother needed help. So I helped them going to 7. _________
the nearest hospital. I stayed here for one and 8. _________
a half hour and made sure that the girl 9. _________
were all right. I hope you can understand. 10. _________
Thank you!
Li Ling
解题技巧点评
1．去掉第二个to：考查动词用法。return当“返还”讲是及物动词，后直接跟宾语。
2．mean改为meant：考查时态。meant to do sth.：本打算做某事（但没做成）。
3．and改为but：考查逻辑。通过前后句可看出此处表示转折。
4．hold改为held：考查语态。be held up：
5．turned the corner：考查冠词。the corner of Park Street：…的拐角处。
6．正确；
7．going改为go：考查非谓语动词。help sb. (to) do sth.：不定式做宾补。
8．here改为there：考查逻辑。the表示the nearest hospital。
9．hour改为hours：考查数的一致性。
10．were改为was：考查主谓一致。
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书面表达
某日，你和朋友正在大街上散步。这时，一辆小车撞倒了一个骑车的女孩。女孩的脚血流不止，你用所学的急救常识为她施救……
你朋友给急救中心打电话。最后，女孩脱离了危险，她的父母非常感谢你们。
请将你的这次经历写一篇120词左右的英语短文，寄给英文报社。
[思路点拨]
这是一篇以叙事为主的记叙文，主要讲述的是my friend and I的经历。写作时，必须按要求以第一人称的口吻，先对所给出的信息要点进行加工整合，包括时间、地点、经过、急救措施等，最后是女孩父母的感激。时态可考虑以一般过去时为主。
[范文借鉴]
One day, my friend and I were walking along the street when we saw a car knocked a girl off her bicycle. We rushed to help her. We found her leg bleeding badly. I had learned some knowledge about first aid before, so I left her where she was. Quickly I found a clean handkerchief and pressed it onto the bleeding point and held it there.
Meanwhile my friend went to telephone the First Aid Center. We were staying with the girl until the doctors and her parents came.
Soon the girl came round. How grateful her parents to us!
[亮点回放]
此篇记叙文覆盖了所有内容要点，叙述清楚、说明简单、达意。作者使用了一些较高级词汇和较复杂结构，如walk along the street, knock a girl off, rush to help her, some knowledge about first aid before等；连接词使用自然，如one day, quickly, meanwhile, soon等；使用了多种复杂句，如when和until引导的时间状语从句，感叹句How grateful her parents to us！等等。
书面表达
最近，李越被评为你们班的“每周之星”。请你根据她的事迹(在上周六下午，不顾天气炎热，为班级选购歌咏比赛服装)，用英语为班级板报写一篇100～120个词的短文。
你的文章应包括下列要点：
1．李越的事迹及其对同学的影响；
2．你的评论。
注意：1.文章的标题和开头已给出(不计入词数)。
2．参考词汇：singing contest歌咏比赛 costume 服装
Star Student of the Week
Li Yue has been awarded the title of “Star Student of the Week”for what she did for our class._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
[范文借鉴]
Star Student of the Week
Li Yue has been awarded the title of“Star Student of the Week”for what she did for our class. On the hot afternoon of last Saturday, Li Yue went downtown and walked from one store to another, looking for the costumes we would wear in the singing contest. While the rest of us were enjoying our leisure time in cool and comfortable rooms, she spent the whole afternoon searching and selecting. Finally, she found the right clothes. Deeply moved by her efforts, we tried our best and won the first prize in the contest.
Li Yue is always warm-hearted and cares a lot about the class. Besides, she often devotes her spare time to helping others. She has set a good example for us. Therefore, she deserves the honor and we would learn from her.
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书面表达
假如你是David，你的朋友Linda最近很烦，因为父母对他要求很严格，整天让他学习，禁止他做自己想干的事情，比如上网、和朋友玩等，请你给他写封信，对他进行心理疏导，并提出一些建议。应包括以下要点：
1．简述自己的类似的经历；
2．提出至少两条建议；
3．词数120左右(开头已为你写好，但不计入总词数)。
Dear Linda，
I can understand how you feel. When I was young，_____________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
[思路点拨]
这是一篇应用文，要求根据提示进行写作。写作的关键是介绍自己的经历以及提出建议。写作时要注意格式，并适当增加细节，使文章连贯、完整。
[范文借鉴]
Dear_Linda，
I_can_understand_how_you_feel._When_I_was_young,_I had the same experience with you. But after I talked to my parents, we had a better understanding of each other. So try to communicate with your parents to let them know that you are wise enough to manage your own business well. To understand them better, always put yourself in their position. Don't you think that all parents in the world love their children even though they are sometimes strict? If you can deal with your time and money wisely, I am sure that your parents will trust you and let you enjoy more freedom.
By the way, it's understandable that your parents ask you to put your studies in the first place.
I hope my advice is of some help to you.
Yours，
David
[亮点回放]
本文要点齐全，词汇丰富，句式多样。在语言的运用上，作者根据表达的需要，灵活使用了过去时、现在时等时态，表达准确，语言地道。此外作者还使用了一些高级的句式，如：名词性从句“it's understandable that your parents ask you to put your studies in the first place”，状语从句“even though they are sometimes strict”，这使文章增色不少。最后一句话“I hope my advice is of some help to you.”起到了画龙点睛的作用。
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仿真训练6
（做题时间：10分钟）
短文改错
假如英语课上老师要求同桌之间交换修改作文，请你修改你同桌的以下作文。文中共有10处语言错误，每句中最多有两处；每处错误仅涉及一个单词的增加，删除或修改。
增加：在缺词处加一个漏字符号 (^)，并在其下面写出该加的词。
删除：把多余的词用斜线(\)划掉。
修改：在错的词下划—横线，并在该下面写出修改后的词。
注意：1．每处错误及其修改均仅限一词；
2．只允许修改10处，多者（从第11处起）不计分。
My friend Nick told me story about his experience back in the US, which was very interested. One day he was having a yard sale and the old man living next door come by to help. As the old man looked over the thing on the yard that were to be sold, he stopped at a box of golden ball for Christmas trees. On the box was a card say: “25 cents each.” “You will never sell these for that much.” he told Nick. Convinced, Nick has brought the price up to 10 cents a piece. Without a moment’s delay, my neighhor picked up the box but announced: “I’ll take them.”
解题技巧点评
My friend Nick told me ^ story about his experience back in the US, which was
a（考查冠词。）
very interested. One day he was having a yard sale and the old man living next door
interesting（-ed结尾的形容词表示被动或完成；-ing结尾的形容词表示主动或进行。此处说明的是which，即story/experience的性质，是interest动作的发出者，故用ing形式。）
come by to help. As the old man looked over the thing on the yard that were to be
came（考查时态的一致性。） in 或ground（考查介词与名词的搭配。）
sold, he stopped at a box of golden ball for Christmas trees. On the box was a card
balls（考查名词。因为是a box of，所以一定是复数形式。）
say: “25 cents each.” “You will never sell these for that much.” he told Nick.
saying（考查动词形式。首先要了解此处是介+名的倒装句，通过句型还原可知动词形式应该是A card was saying…on the box.）
Convinced, Nick has brought the price up to 10 cents a piece. Without a moment’s
（考查时态的一致性。） down（考查逻辑。从25降到10。）
delay, my neighhor picked up the box but announced: “I’ll take them.”
His（考查人称逻辑。） and（考查结构逻辑。）
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